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2015年3月28日雅思写作机经解析

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The charts below show the number of working hours per week in industrial sector in four European countries in 2002.

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分析:四张柱图,虽然每一个图看起来都很简单,但是碰到数据多的时候,大家还是要注意分组归类。不管什么形式的数据图,语言表达都是拉分点,所以语言的准确性和多样性永远是我们应该孜孜不倦追求着的。。。

Sample answer

The bar charts give some information about how long the people worked each week in France, Denmark, Sweden and the UK in the year of 2002.

In France, more than half of the workers worked for 31 to 35 hours per week. The percentage of people who worked for 36-40 hours and 46-50 hours was 35% and 20% respectively. And the figure for the rest working hours accounted for around 10%.

Denmark and Sweden witness target=_blank class=infotextkey>witnessed the highest proportion of people working for 36-40 hours, which was quite different from that in France. The second and the third place came from 31-35 hours and 41-45 hours (25% and 12% in Denmark; 35% and 30% in Sweden). Additionally, the proportion of people who worked for less or more hours in Denmark was higher that in Sweden.

When it comes to the UK, it is interesting to note that as the working hours increased, the proportion seemed to be higher, except the figure for 36-40 hours. 50% of the British people’s working hours lasted for 36-40 hours.

Overall, France was the country where people worked for the least hours, while the Swedish spent the most time on work among the people from these four different countries.

分析:

今天的题目属于老题修改。注意高亮的红色字体。要围绕题目中的这两个词去展开,而非单纯介绍电脑和手机的利弊。

Some educators have warned thatthe prevalenceof mobile phones and the internet has a negative effect on adolescents’ academic ability. I agree with this view.

Firstly, the wide use of “Internet English” is regarded as the culprit of the declining writing skills.One obvious reason is that young adults may make some grammatical mistakes unconsciously because of the frequent use of improper abbreviations and punctuation on mobile devices, and this might pose a threat to their future career where a professional writing ability is required in most companies. Therefore, many linguists have expressed their concerns that the instant messaging and chatting on mobile phones might harm the ability of using formal written English.

Secondly, the poor reading proficiency can be put down to the frequent use of technologies as well. Compared to the older generation, young people todayare cluttered with different gadgets, like iPad and iPhone. For instance, with easy access to wifi, they can surf the internetanywhere and anytime to follow the latest information of their idols in another country. However, most social networks deliver fragment and useless information, which not only steals time away from solitary reading but also undermine the ability to think independently.In my opinion, this phenomenon should be reversed as soon as possible because reading has a profound effect on a nation’s future.

In conclusion,while these electronic devices make the communication much more convenient, I am in the camp that they might affect young people’s academic performance negatively.
 

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